The text of a website does two things: it drives visitors to your site, then it keeps them there. Or it doesn't. First of all, I want to compliment you on your website. I work with designers and have a high standard of user experience and find your website aesthetic. While looking at the copy however, I agree with you completely that the ideas, tone, and energy is there but it is missing a certain touch.
What I can offer to you is a stylistic overhaul. I am enthusiastic about the vision of your company and would have no trouble finding a voice for your text that will excite, energize, and engage your site visitors and keep them clicking. In addition, I am familiar with the use of industry keywords that will help drive visitors to your site in the first place.
I will work with the same dedication on this project that you have shown to it this far, and I will work on it quickly, so that you can finally finish this up and move forward. I estimate that your site is about 10-15 standard pages. I believe I could get this back to you in 8-12 working hours. Of course I am willing to be in touch and review the changes alongside you until you are satisfied that the text is exactly as you want it.
I see that you have already received many bids from the same names I see bidding on every project. I hope you give me, a newbie to this site, a chance to give you a personalized and professional experience.